Read about a class room assignment for cinquains using the parts of speech: http://www.readwritethink.org/classroom-resources/lesson-plans/composing-cinquain-poems-with-43.html
Or checkout the work of a second grade boy http://www.squidoo.com/kenneths-cinquain-poems
Then come back and enjoy Evelyn’s pieces.
The fog
Is a dancer,
Brooding on rough waters.
A wave disturbs her and she lifts
Her veil.
**********
My feet
Sought the valley
And were strangled in mud;
But my fingers played in star-dust
With you!
Evelyn Coffey
This veil-lifting seems to me to bespeak Evelyn's desire to be truly seen, to set aside her often palpable shyness and delight in herself as she delighted in the dance.
ReplyDeleteAnd I suspect that the second was written to her sister Rose, "high there" as she has written elsewhere, above the trapping ooze of the world. The word "But" bespeaks this salvation, this freedom to be in both worlds. In this way her sister's celestial residence provided her a place to stay whenever she desired or needed it. Perhaps that is why she seemed just a visitor here among us.